is this any good? its called my love, mr life.

i remember tracing the tape around your broken body,
why did they take you,
Ты were just a boy,
fourteen years old,
starting life,
venturing into the world of new experinces and pleasures,
new ideas and new feelings,
it kills me to see Ты this way,
and now they say i most go and try to ease the pain,
the pain of losing my love,
my life.
 emmyliz13 posted Больше года
next question »

Поэзия Ответы

Dwolf247 said:
Its good! I Любовь it, but its too short. Try expanding on what Ты already have here. ;)
select as best answer
posted Больше года 
*
thanks for the critism...lol
emmyliz13 posted Больше года
*
Ты mean constructive criticism. Hehe.
Dwolf247 posted Больше года
*
yeah yeah
emmyliz13 posted Больше года
Annacrombie said:
its good as it is, i like short poems thier like a break from the 17 paged ones Ты get
select as best answer
posted Больше года 
*
agreed...thanks for the response!!! means a lot to me!!!
emmyliz13 posted Больше года
next question »