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Darkwing: The Tale of a Bat and the Destiny

Chapter 1

The moonlight shone throughout the forest, catching a glimpse of the trees and their shadows. The bats flew around the night sky catching prey and whatnot. A little bat sat on the branch watching all of the other bats; his tiny tuffs of hair covering his right eye and his мех flowing with the gentle breeze. A beautiful, slightly large bat bigger than all the others, flew over to the little bat and she spoke in a gentle tone.

“Darkwing”

“Yes mother?”

“Hello my son, do Ты see all of these bats before Ты flying and out on their hunt?”

“Why yes I do”

“You will one день fly among them, spreading those beautiful wings of yours. Putting fear into enemies’ eyes as they take a look at you. They’ll cower into hiding….you will make us proud, all of us” She took a gentle glimpse of her little son who looked at her with his gorgeous red eyes.

“I understand, I hope that one день I will fly among the other bats and go on hunts” He squeaked happily, his mother had chuckled a bit before wrapping her large wings around him, he too wrapping his wings around his mother.

“I Любовь you, my son”

“I Любовь Ты too mother, will Ты always be with me?”

“No my dear, there will be one день that I will have to pass and go up to heaven but that is far from now sweetheart, for as long as Ты grow, I’ll be here by your side” She kissed the вверх of his head lightly, then looking into his eyes.

“Did Ты finish your dinner?”

“I have mother”

“Have Ты cleaned yourself?”

“I have mother”

“That’s my good boy” She nuzzled him before leaving the branch on which he sat. She joined the group of bats as Darkwing watched her go. He heard something in the distance as his ears perked up, he curiously crawled over the branch