can anyone give me an opinion on how to make this better?

Something has severely struck my curiosity
Did he know of his ill fate?
What were his last thoughts?
Did he even have any?
If so were they about his family?
If his life flashed before his very eyes,
Did he have any regrets about what he saw?
What were his last words?
So many Вопросы about this stranger dying before my very eyes ,
whom I know absolutely nothing about.
The touchiest of subjects and its stuck on my mind
Truthfully, the only people who know the answer
are forever gone.
When time comes for me to know the answer
What will I be thinking about?
Will I know of what is to come of me?
Who will I think about?
What will my last words be and who will they be to?
And when my very life flashes before my eyes,
Will I regret what I see?

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Starlight1o1 said:
I think that this is very interesting and doesn't need changes to be made to it. It instantly captured my attention and that's what is supposed to happpen. The Вопрос were a bit long (I tend to do that sometimes too) but that doesn't make it any less interesting. I think that this will make a good story and I would want to read it. I hope this helps Ты at least a little bit even though I basicly told Ты not to change anything.
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thanks it actually did, i wasnt sure if it needed changing или not.
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