Don't Miss the Moment 

Kyaaaaaa!
That was beautiful!!!
Despite the fact that I didn't watch YGO, and I don't know the chars, I simply loved the fiction!!!
Its amazing though, that you can describe such passionate intercourse without having an experience (your last comment). Apparently its true when they say that the best sex happens in our minds!...
Good luck with your creativity and don't forget to link! :P

^LOL, thank you so much! And yeah, our psyche can be or best pleasure tool! XD