замок [xy xx] Runaway while Ты can

I decided to make my first Фан fiction about замок and Beckett so constructive criticism is appreciated. Please comment.




"It's getting late, we should sleep on it." замок сказал(-а) looking at his watch.
Beckett looked up from the papers she was reading.
"Separately!" замок stammered quickly.
Beckett lowered her eyes to the floor.
"Katherine Beckett, I never..." замок whispered as he headed for the door.
"Well, why not, Castle? Am I not attractive enough for you?"
"No." замок сказал(-а) turning around.
Beckett got up from her chair and walked over to Castle. "Then what is it? Don't Ты sleep with...