Hi Everyone!
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what Ты think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t Ты see?” She сказал(-а) icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his детская кроватка and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the детская кроватка and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the детская кроватка and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are Ты saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They сказал(-а) that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And Ты think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil сказал(-а) flatly, “He obviously has your огонь using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what Ты think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t Ты see?” She сказал(-а) icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his детская кроватка and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the детская кроватка and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the детская кроватка and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are Ты saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They сказал(-а) that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And Ты think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil сказал(-а) flatly, “He obviously has your огонь using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
OK so i was walking down the street...all alone...in the rain...not happy but not sad ether...when suddenly I ran into a магнолия tree!I don't know how I didn't see it...or why it was in the middle of the road-but it was there and when I looked at it I saw it was the biggest магнолия I had ever seen;it was absolutely GINORMOUS!it to be at least as tall as a skyscraper. I couldn't even see the top.Now what is the easiest way to get past a tree? Go around it of course! but when i looked there was a wall!Two walls!on ether side of the дерево that prevented me from passing(again,how didn't I see this before?)It was not an ordinary
Стена ether,and must have taken allot of work to build because it was as tall,or taller than the tree!so I was stuck with a магнолия and two walls
what was I to do?turn back?I had come too far!so knowing this,what do Ты think I did?What would Ты have done?
Стена ether,and must have taken allot of work to build because it was as tall,or taller than the tree!so I was stuck with a магнолия and two walls
what was I to do?turn back?I had come too far!so knowing this,what do Ты think I did?What would Ты have done?
I look at the old photographs. It kills me to see him smile. I've only heard about him. I hear he would have loved me. I hear he was nice. I hear that he was a good dad. I hear he was an okay husband. I hear that he would have made a good grandfather. It's not fair. It kills me when my dad talks about him. My dad сказал(-а) one of his last words to him were "Dont miss me when I'm gone." Those words run through my head. день and night and keep me up thinking of him. Why did he have to go? I pray he's okay and fine in heaven. I pretend he's still here. If only he were ... I miss him....
I guess he's just....
Hard to Let Go
Dedicated to my grandfather I miss Ты ... even if I never met Ты =,[
Далее journal entry coming up in few please
R&R
Thanks!!
I guess he's just....
Hard to Let Go
Dedicated to my grandfather I miss Ты ... even if I never met Ты =,[
Далее journal entry coming up in few please
R&R
Thanks!!
First off,harry potter has actual struggle and creative and developed villains while twilight centers around a girl who is completely dependent on a 2 hot guys who go to war for her and constantly abuse her.Second,harry potter has compelling storyline and fun unique characters while twilight is ALL STEREOTYPES, with the new hot shallow girl who runs a Любовь треугольник and the the two guys and their Друзья who fight over her.And lastly, for all Ты people who say that edward is hotter than harry, cedric is hotter than edward.look at all characters,not just the main ones.peace y'all
I come Главная and their fighting.
I hate it! I want to tell them to stop.
But I cant, because Im stuck in the middle.
They tug me, playing with me.
I cant handle the pain!
When I go to school no one can see my pain.
I fake my happiness.
I want to go hide in a corner and cry.
But I cant.
Because no one lends a shoulder to cry on.
My Друзья dont understand!
I come Главная again, and my parents pull me.
Ripping my сердце like a angry raven.
My siblings, they... they... leave me there. Alone.
I feel alone.
Deserted.
No where I feel happy.
Because Im alone.
Why cant anyone see?
Why cant my parents stop fighting?
Why cant my Друзья lend a hand?
Why cant my siblings pull me to my feet?
Why am I alone?
I hate it! I want to tell them to stop.
But I cant, because Im stuck in the middle.
They tug me, playing with me.
I cant handle the pain!
When I go to school no one can see my pain.
I fake my happiness.
I want to go hide in a corner and cry.
But I cant.
Because no one lends a shoulder to cry on.
My Друзья dont understand!
I come Главная again, and my parents pull me.
Ripping my сердце like a angry raven.
My siblings, they... they... leave me there. Alone.
I feel alone.
Deserted.
No where I feel happy.
Because Im alone.
Why cant anyone see?
Why cant my parents stop fighting?
Why cant my Друзья lend a hand?
Why cant my siblings pull me to my feet?
Why am I alone?
