An idea popped into my head the other день and its been playing like a little movie in my head ever since. I really need to know if its any good, или if the idea has already been used. Also I need Совет for the characters and their names. I also appreciate constructive criticism and grammar and spelling. The names are temporary. I've never written a book that is completely in the present tense so please help me catch any tense mistakes! Um, oh yeah. It doesn't have a Название yet so if Ты have any suggestions just let me know!
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short Предварительный просмотр of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank Ты Mrs. Monrale, Ты too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a Предварительный просмотр of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah сказал(-а) the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in Любовь with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be Музыка to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up Любовь notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short Предварительный просмотр of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank Ты Mrs. Monrale, Ты too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a Предварительный просмотр of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah сказал(-а) the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in Любовь with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be Музыка to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up Любовь notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
Author's Note: "Look, now I am going to tell Ты a story of the life of Rosemary Vega a.k.a me."
I am 11 years old.
My birthday is on March 25.
I am very talented at Письмо stories, Пение like famous people (example: Shakira, Selena Gomez, Demi Lovato and Lady Gaga) I Любовь to act!
When I grow up I want to be singer или a voice actress.
I am interested in звезда Wars, Pokemon, Everybody Hates Chris and George Lopez.
My Избранное pokemon are: Jirachi, Roserade, Mismagious and Meganium.
I was born in Wilson, North Carolina.
Thank Ты for giving me your time to read this article! :D
I am 11 years old.
My birthday is on March 25.
I am very talented at Письмо stories, Пение like famous people (example: Shakira, Selena Gomez, Demi Lovato and Lady Gaga) I Любовь to act!
When I grow up I want to be singer или a voice actress.
I am interested in звезда Wars, Pokemon, Everybody Hates Chris and George Lopez.
My Избранное pokemon are: Jirachi, Roserade, Mismagious and Meganium.
I was born in Wilson, North Carolina.
Thank Ты for giving me your time to read this article! :D
"Overall, I can say that I do love him.."<3
Alone!
There once was a girl who biked and ran
with her best friend who had a bright оранжевый tan
But then one день she when biking alone
and thats when she fell along way from home.
She lay still on the ground
not makeing a sound,and thats when she found
that she could not talk
let alone walk
As she slowly made her way home
she wished that she had a phone
so she could call for help
insted of put up with the pain that made her yelp.
She pushed her bike down the dusty track
with a sore haed and an acking back
Then she came to the place where her and her best friend met
just as the sun was begining to set
The Далее день at school she was no where in sight
which gave her best frined a very big fright
but she was a Главная tucked up in bed
with a sore leg and an acking head
Thats when she remebered what her best friend had сказал(-а)
about not going out bikeing alone
along way from home.
What do Ты think?(I think it is very bad) and sorry of the spelling.
There once was a girl who biked and ran
with her best friend who had a bright оранжевый tan
But then one день she when biking alone
and thats when she fell along way from home.
She lay still on the ground
not makeing a sound,and thats when she found
that she could not talk
let alone walk
As she slowly made her way home
she wished that she had a phone
so she could call for help
insted of put up with the pain that made her yelp.
She pushed her bike down the dusty track
with a sore haed and an acking back
Then she came to the place where her and her best friend met
just as the sun was begining to set
The Далее день at school she was no where in sight
which gave her best frined a very big fright
but she was a Главная tucked up in bed
with a sore leg and an acking head
Thats when she remebered what her best friend had сказал(-а)
about not going out bikeing alone
along way from home.
What do Ты think?(I think it is very bad) and sorry of the spelling.
You
It's the middle of the night,
And I can't sleep
Your face, planted with a smile
Are the only things I see
Your voice calling my name
Is the only thing I hear
I can feel your hand rubbing my back
Hearing Ты whisper ''good night''
I jump and look around,
And soon realize Ты are not there
I sob, tightly holding the gift Ты once gave me
It's right here, on my bed, in perfect condition.
30 минуты later, I wipe my face and go back to sleep…
I wake up once again
And the cycle starts all over again…
It's the middle of the night,
And I can't sleep
Your face, planted with a smile
Are the only things I see
Your voice calling my name
Is the only thing I hear
I can feel your hand rubbing my back
Hearing Ты whisper ''good night''
I jump and look around,
And soon realize Ты are not there
I sob, tightly holding the gift Ты once gave me
It's right here, on my bed, in perfect condition.
30 минуты later, I wipe my face and go back to sleep…
I wake up once again
And the cycle starts all over again…
