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Is this character a Mary-Sue?

He seems like he might be a Mary-Sue to me, so I was wondering what Ты all thought.

Name: Takumi

Age: 17

Gender: male

Looks: long, curly, purple hair, ice blue eyes

Personality: slutty, nice, shy, he's very affectionate since he never got very much affection when he was younger

Backstory: he had a normal childhood and good parents. When he was 14 he got a boyfriend. He kept it a secret from his parents since they were homophobic as well as most people in the place where he lived. When he was 15 he was raped by his boyfriend and tried to leave him. His boyfriend didn't let him and abused him for a few months until Takumi's friend got him away from him.

If Ты need any еще info let me know in the Комментарии and I'll tell you. Also please answer honestly, I want to improve him. Don't just say Ты don't like him though, because then I don't know how to fix him. Thank you!
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I changed his name from a Japanese name to a British name.
misscrazel posted Больше года
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или maybe it was Welsh...idk.
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Book-Freak said:
I'm not sure if he could be called a Gary-Stu, but I think there is a contradiction in the information Ты gave: Ты say he had a normal childhood and good parents but also that he didn't get much attention as a child... If they were good parents, wouldn't he have gotten enough attention?
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Thanks! There were a few parts I skipped in the backstory, so that's why it contradicted the other parts.
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egyptprincess7 said:
He's not a Gary-Stu from the looks of it. I don't understand though how his personality can be slutty? And Ты did contradict yourself in the backstory. Otherwise he's fine.
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Thanks! Why can't slutty be in the personality?
misscrazel posted Больше года
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I mean it can be a personality trait but no were on this bio does it prove that he's slutty so it's no point in calling him slutty.
I-Luv-L posted Больше года
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Well I didn't mention it I guess, I meant to, but he actually does start sleeping with other men.
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BlondLionEzel said:
He's not a Mary Sue
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Thanks!
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Welcome :)
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neonClouds said:
"Name: Takumi"
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 "Name: Takumi"
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???
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MineTurtle5 said:
Here, check out this link:

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It's really good for helping Ты know if your character is a Mary Sue/ Gary Stu. Also, Ты can check out this article. I've found it quite helpful:

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Thanks! I'll check it out!
misscrazel posted Больше года
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You're welcome! :)
MineTurtle5 posted Больше года
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used it for al my characters, it was great! Thanks!
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You're welcome! :)
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